I should be annoyed at her for endangering all the Saint Shields... but she's somehow incredibly sweet >>. Which therefore makes it diifciult for me to hate the little chibi... I pity Ozuma for being forced to 'put his foot down' and give such a harsh and out-of-character command. The interaction in the first half conveys a lot of hints about the relationship that Korl and Ozuma have - whilst she respects Ozuma's authority and loves him, she is still stubborn and unwilling to change her own character. Consequently, Ozuma often allows her to have her own way on the basis that he is a caring person and is unwilling to force Korl into situations where he becomes an autocrat and she becomes a victim, but this inconsistency of his actions has caused the situation to backfire; Korl follows Ozuma's orders but only when they agree with her own ideals. Thus, even though the two care about each other, Ozuma finds it difficult to be regarded seriously as a leader and Korl has yet to reach the age of maturity at which she will realise the dangerous nature of her actions.
Or maybe I'm just reading far too deep into it . Still, there's a lot of emotion there. The implication seems to be that Korl and Ozuma have a sibling-like relationship.
Oooonly thing that stands out in my mind is the almost-uniform way you're doing most of the sound effects, and it kind of throws it off and kind of takes the emotion away from it. XD I think you're on the right track with like, say, fzzZZzzZZzzz, but tap, glance, turn, and nod feel kinda generic and don't really look good with the rest of your BAD-ASSED MASTERPIECE. Not so much the words as it is the font and the size/presentation as such.
Yeah. That's reaching. But I know that's what you want DEEP DOWN.
... Korl will get hers. She will pay for her INSOLENCE, yes?
The font for those 'cruddy' SFXs is, of course, Impact. It's like teh ultimate place-holder font before I decide on a decent one. Unfortunately knowing HOW lazy I can be I'll probably forget about fixing them. XD;;
But seriously, I totally appreciate that level of criticism. It's stuff that definitely can and will be fix'd. (I mean, you know ALL the best fonts to use as is!)
(Nyahahah, insolence is RIGHT. I figure we can discuss spoilers here since NO ONE ever reads my comment threads- even though they should because I hate repeating myself over and over. Bastards.)